Your side of the bed still smells like...
The sun’s warmth …
…the wind’s peace
Everything...
…everything
that’s right for
…me.
a place. for poetry. and the sharing and caring of it
I appreciate your choice of line breaks. They add to the sensory experience of the words wafting across the bed.
ReplyDeleteYou could've finished that first line with soooo many things. I was just waiting (in the few seconds it took my brain to process it) to see what it would be. I like your choice. Very light-hearted and yet not shallow at all. The kind of depth that's best if free-fallen through.
ReplyDeletethanks guys....this poem started out being four times longer:) sometimes downsizing makes for a great poem:)
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